Research and Planning: Rough Draft of a Comedy Scene for Proposal 2

Character:
Male from the City(protagonist) - James
Current Girlfriend - Jenny
Mum - Margaret
Dad - Alan

Scene:
[James and Jenny arrive late at night at James' parents house, its about 8pm. He knocks on the door. Jenny is excited to meet his parents. Margaret opens the door with a squeal of excitement she hugs him tight whilst inspecting his hair and rubbing his sideburns.]

Margaret: "do they not have Razors in the city"

[James ignores that comment.]

James: "Mum this is Jenny"

Jenny: "h..."

[Alan interrupts.]

Alan: "James!"

[James goes for a handshake but Alan goes for a hug.]

Alan: "Have you put on a bit of timber son?"

James: "Always a pleasure Dad"

[Meanwhile Jenny is just stood there awkwardly]